AS Draft Feed Back Sheet Rupert Radley

As Draft Feed Back Sheet Rupert Radley

First Draft: Front Cover

First Draft: Contents Page

First Draft: Double Page Spread

Front Cover Mock Ups

This is mock up has become the basic ground work of my finished design. Aspects from it which work well are The large mastheads and the simple cover lines. I have continued to use these in my final piece bu I have adapted them to create a better look.

This mock up did not turn out as well as the previous one. Parts of this mock up that I don't feel worked well are the to larger image and the Masthead that is to small. On my final piece to counter this I will improve the final image by resizing it appropriately and I will make the Masthead larger. Secondly I do not think the guitar works well. I drew round it to try and help align it along with the same cartoon style font I have used for my Masthead and the Rory Galvenez. Instead I managed to make the impression that I had drawn the guitar from scratch.

Points on this mock up that i like are limited to the banner that runs along the bottom; I like the colour used and the black and white image, I will try and use this in my final work. The rest of the mock up does not work well as I have used to many fonts and to many different sizes. The Cover lines are not set out in a structured manner and therefore it looks unprofessional. Lastly I do not like the Masthead design. It did not turn out as well as I had hoped, I will try and use a better design for my final piece.

The one on the left is my attempt to copy the Q magazine featuring Brandon Flowers. I like the Slanted writing and the list of artists placed on the front cover.

Front cover mock ups

As I used a almost cartoon font on this mock up I decided to draw around my artists guitar to try and mirror that cartoon effect. 

Contents page mock ups

In this contents page I think that the banner along the top worked well and I look to try and mirror it against the "Contents" which runs down the side of the page.

Mock ups: contents

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This is my first mock up of my contents page. don't pay attention to the nasty cream colour, I suffered some photoshop issues.

Double page spread mock ups

Final Photographs

These are all pictures I am considering using for my final front cover.

This image conveys the idea of what I wanted to do on my front cover; the idea that he has travelled, this is to be shown through the use of his guitar slung over shoulder. However I decided that his legs were to close together and didn't really give the idea of him walking. Secondly parts of the image have been cut out or are not within frame.

This image works well as it incorporates the idea of him walking; his legs are open. Secondly he is smiling and I think that this is good as it gives the character a personality. However his posture is on a slant and i f I cut him out to place him on my front cover it might look strange and not work as effectively as hoped.

I also like this image. It is not dynamic as the other to are in the idea that he is travelling, however it shows him playing a chord on his guitar. I also like how he is turning his head. However I do not think it will work as because he is crouching the image is quite compact and I think that it will look out of proportion when stretched to touch the Masthead, as is custom in magazines.

This image works better than the last in the idea that he is not crouching and therefore he would be able to touch the Masthead easily. However it differs from the idea that I would like to portray. One that he is travelling. Although I like the stance that is being pulled and how he is looking the opposite way than to his guitar. However and Rather unfortunately he is pulling a rather sinister face, not the appearance I am looking for on my magazine.



I think that this is the most effective picture that I have taken as it conveys everything I hope to in my front cover. I like the stance he is using and how the guitar is positioned. I plan to use this image and perhaps change it into black and white. To create an artistic and powerful look.

Fonts

Dafonts Fonts

Evaluating class feedback from pitch

I designed my Magazine pitch to try and receive as much audience participation as possible so as to try and increase the feedback from the class. I used parts of my pitch to help me do this effectively. The parts of the pitch I used to help me do this was the names of my magazine.
For this I took a poll in my class of which names sounded best for my magazine and I had a strong results. The class voted for their favourite and the one which received the highest approval was AMM or Alternative Music Magazine. I took Alternative Music Magazine and I Incorporated this into the name. I took the Alternative Music Magazine (AMM) and changed it to Alternative Indie Magazine so that it spells AIM. I feel this is a change to make a name that my class liked, better.

I was apprehensive about announcing my three colour palette to my class as I didn't know how well it would be taken. I knew I as keen on it as I thought that Orange, Black and white complemented each other well but I was cautious about how the class would feel. When I did reach this part in my pitch the class liked my three colour palette and I received helpful comments. One comment was that it would appeal to the slightly older readers of the magazine, another was that it helps tie my magazine down to the slightly strange music genre; this is what I was hoping to do.

Lastly I received feedback on my targeted audience. I was told that aiming to incorporate new listeners of alternative music whilst hoping to attract an older generation of listeners; incorporating those from teenage to late twenties was striking to high and was unrealistic. I therefore decided to change target audience age to that roughly of  my own age, this being 16 but still trying to reach those of early twenties. I am now hoping my magazine will appeal to the age range of 16-24. This is a much smaller gap than I had before.

My Pitch

Coursework schedule

As Media G321 CW Schedule 2010-2011 Corrected Version2

Represntation of a social group within my magazine

Within my magazine a social group will be represented. My magazine is aimed at young adults, primarily at the age of 15-24. This group of people will have a strong knowledge of the Alternative music portrayed within my magazine and will be keen listeners of the same sort of bands/artists. They will be laid back and easy going type of people who have a broad range of music within the genre of my magazine, and will thus be able to understand why my magazine may vary heavily between certain artists and bands. For example Jack Johnson who is a singer songwriter or Frightened Rabbit who are a band of slightly weird Alternative rock. The fashion sense of my magazine isn't all out Indie and it isn't strange clothes to mirror the Alternative twist. Instead people who listen to the type of music presented will have a casual fashion sense, preferring to be laid back in some casual jeans and a hoody.

The readers may play some sort of instrument; one which fits the genre of the magazine, perhaps guitar or maybe drums. The readers will again most likely attend college or university as I believe that this it the type of audience my magazine appeal to.